Hey you! You, staring at the screen! Listen to me! Whatever
I tell you to do it, do it without question! Phew, my name is Timmy
Ahlstrom and I am freshman at Santa Clara University. Of those who remain to listen to me preach,
like I was saying, I am a freshman in a writing class here,
and my assignment is to blog about food and health. Of even those who remain, the
writing class is titled “The Rhetoric of Recipes” in which we discuss several
problems in our world today revolving around food, health,
business, etc. Following the
problems, we analyze the solutions of the professionals have to offer for
these solutions. The purpose
of this blog is criticize these experts’ solutions and to offer my final,
simple,
and realistic solution or solutions to our problems concerning our food,
health,
and businesses. I will be
attempting to come up with a reasonable solution that will take into
consideration all of problems today. I am
not critiquing any of these arguments through any specific lens,
rather through the voice of young philosophical man who wants his voice to be
heard.
Growing
up,
my dad always has told us to study business or engineering. Being a true believer in my dad, I
listened to him. I am totally
ok with this decision; however, a little part of me wants me to become a
philosopher very bad. My power of
twisting arguments started as a child. I come
from a big family of four older brothers and one younger sister. My four older brothers beat the snot of me
everyday due to their size. I
adapted this power of twisting and debunking everything my older brothers said
just to get my revenge. I would
correct their grammar, or make fun of something stupid they say. My passion to counter-argue has evolved from
getting revenge to keeping my mind thinking. So I will attempt to use
my philosopher’s mind to come up with my solutions surrounding the problems
brought up in class.
Being
in class for several weeks now, I have read multiple books,
articles, etc. about problems regarding food, health,
and business that play a role in our world today. Following the problems, we
discussed solutions that coinsurers had to offer up to these problems like
obesity, poverty, etc. One of
my biggest flaws is being timid, and not speaking in class. I bottled all my emotions to these solutions
the experts had offered up. A lot
of them are not realistic enough to have the average human being live out to. As the weeks went on, I realized how much
all of these problems are intertwined, creating chaos. I never knew obesity was liked with poverty
and vice versa, or the about effects of advertisements has on
consumers. So I will be taking this
blog post-by-post, step-by-step; and I will analyze these solutions. Hopefully, just hopefully,
will I be able to create one simple-realistic solution that can solve our
problems, and live better lives.
Before
I dive into any of my first couple blogs, I would like to clarify
that I agree with a lot of what these experts say. A major portion of Eric Schlosser’s Fast
Food Nation is him discussing how much McDonalds and other fast foods are
awful for humans. I totally
agree with that. In Michael
Pollan’s The Omnivore’s Dilemma, he mentions the importance of knowing where
your food is coming from. We cannot be
ignorant about our food. It leads us
down a slippery slope of obesity, which is where we stand today. I agree with that too. However, I solely disagree with
what they believe is the solution to our health today. I just believe that my solution or solutions
are more realistic to the every day human being.
Like I said
earlier, I am a very timid person. I am timid because I am a sweet,
nice kid who never wants to hurt one’s feelings. “Is it that simple?” will work as therapy for
me in a way. Now before you start
reading any of the future blog posts, please remember that these are my opinions,
and my beliefs, and that I respect other people’s opinions just like
my own. My views are never meant to hurt anyone’s
feelings. So please respect my
opinions as I would respect anyone else’s. One other thing I want to mention is that I
am no expert in these fields. I am
no Pollan. I am no Schlosser. I may exaggerate or say things that only
experts would know are incorrect. I am a
simply a smart, logical college student who is trying to put pieces
together slowly to solve our puzzle of chaos. So please be bias in your thoughts and please
feel free to comment on my posts about your criticisms, respectfully of course.
FIRST
ReplyDeleteTimmy,
I LOLed at this blog. Especially the last paragraph where you call yourself a nice guy. I just can't stop reading these blogs. They're just simply too funny--too Timmy. Good job laying out the rules and saying that your opinion isn't always correct because lots of times people run into trouble if they are caught saying something wrong. I'm interested to see how you develop your question in this blog.
I really enjoyed reading this blog post. The first sentence really caught my attention and made me want to continue reading. I like how you incorporated some background information about your family and your passion for philosophy; it gives me a better sense of who the writer is. I also liked when you said "I am no Pollan. I am no Schlosser." It was definitely catchy. My only real criticism is your use of the word "solution." You used it a lot throughout the post and it became somewhat repetitive. Other than that, the content is really solid.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very good first blog post, it has a great into that brings the reader in and makes them want to keep reading. I think it was also a good idea to explain why exactly you are writing this blog for, and you depict the goals of our CTW course very well. You introduce what you want to talk about for the rest of your blog, and you seem really excited about your topic. You mention that you're not like Pollan or Schlosser, but you can definitely use their examples and ideas to form your own argument and opinions. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI love your blog Timmy! It's easy to see how invested you got and I love how neutral you stayed with these difficult topics. That being said, if it were up to you, would you completely get rid of fast food or just simply restrict it?
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